Between this entry and your previous one, you’ve demonstrated interest in an impressive range of topics. I think you might find it helpful when, at our retreat, you have the opportunity to share your […]

I appreciate you taking a closer look at a part of your mind map. In the interest of zooming in even further, I’m wondering if you happen to know, at this early stage in the process, the names of anyone […]

You’ve created a detailed, attractive, and easy-to-follow map that seems to captures much of the thinking you’ve done about this issue so far. Well done!

As I read through it, I can already […]

Since your last two entries focused on dress […]

Here are a few other questions that occurred to me while reading your map: What’s the current level of awareness around refugees in Vermont? What are Vermonters’ attitudes […]

I love the journalistic tone of this entry–dramatic yet truthful–and the way you weave quotations throughout it.

Speaking of quotations, I’m interested to learn the source for your mother’s […]

Nice work speaking to a variety of people for this post, and you do a good job touching on some of the many issues that arise from the double standard that exists within our culture for men and women. […]

You’ve settled on what seems to me to be a fascinating topic. I notice that your descriptions of the interviews you’ve conducted so far raise questions that might help steer you as you pursue this topic, […]

Your writing skills make this entry, like your last one, a pleasure to read. I especially like the way you pivot from the drug issue to the one that becomes the focus of this entry.

I admit that […]

Thank you for sharing this powerful story. I should feel shocked, but the kind of unequal treatment you describe is so rampant in our society that I can’t even say I’m surprised to hear it. What I can say […]

As Katelyn said before me, your passion on this topic shines through. You raise some important issues facing our country, including school shootings, access to guns, and Washington’s role (or lack […]

I’m Bob Uhl, an English teacher at Tuttle Middle School in South Burlington and a coach for What’s the Story. I missed our kickoff event, but I look forward to meeting you at our next in-person […]

I’m Bob Uhl, an English teacher at Tuttle Middle School in South Burlington.

I’ll echo Dixie in referring to your comment about looking forward to new obstacles. It’s not often I hear people say […]

I’m Bob Uhl, an English teacher at Tuttle Middle School in South Burlington and one of the coaches for What’s the Story. I wasn’t able to make the kickoff at Middlebury College, but I’m sure we’ll have […]

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This post nicely combines much of the information you’ve gathered over the past several weeks into an effective pitch. Your passion for your topic is clear (“We can and will do it!”), and I like that […]

I can relate to your feeling, expressed in your opening line, about having a hard time explaining a topic because it feels so obvious. Sometimes the simplest things can be the most difficult to put […]

It’s been a delight watching you build a case around your topic for the past month-and-a-half. In keeping with the directions for this post, you’ve provided a solid basis for a pitch that I look forward […]

I haven’t commented here before, but in scanning through these entries I just had to drop in and say how impressed I am with this mind map. A job well done!

I haven’t commented here before, but I wanted to drop in and say WOW! What an impressive mind map! Keep up the good work.

Good to see you continuing to investigate other topics. This one here has been an especially hot one, given the (seemingly never-ending) presidential campaigns. Although it’s a bit hard for me to […]

You’ve done some good work on the topic of volunteerism, but it’s good to see you branching out, as well, and to an (at least) equally significant issue. I, too, noticed that several other folks in […]

I think the specific issue you’ve identified here–women not being able to work because of the expense of child care–is an interesting one that’s quite relevant to your broader topic. You’ve begun […]

You’ve done an especially good job here framing this conflict as a struggle between these organizations. Your citation of Europe as a potential model for how we might address this issue here piques my […]

Nice work on blog post number four. It’s clear how much of an effect Sinek’s talk has had on you, and I think it’s a good thing that you plan to keep some of his ideas in mind as you move forward. I […]

I like the way you begin your entry here, by describing your first impressions of Sinek: you heard first how he talked and then focused on the specifics of what he was saying. I, too, found him a […]

Very nice job on your fourth blog post. I learned quite a bit here, including the four strategies that Mercy for Animals advocates to address the issue at hand. I especially like that you’ve outlined […]

This is an interesting idea you’re investigating here. Not being a native Vermonter, I can tell you that this state has something of a reputation for being perhaps more community-oriented than your […]

Nice work here, and I especially like your title. You’ve got the ball rolling on conversations about this important issue. I don’t know how old Carolyn and Camille are, but if they have jobs, I wonder […]